To Abi & Ellie

To Abi and Ellie:
For some reason, I could not post my comment under your writing so I am adding it as a post on my own page.
I love reading your stories. I have one suggestion/criticism for you. You might try using words other than "and" to connect your thoughts. This is an example of what you could write: "...he bowed as he walked past her." instead of: "and he bowed and walked past her."
Or this: "...Anne smiled as she took her sister's arm..." instead of: "...Anne smiled and took her sister's arm..." Over using "and" makes sentences start to sound like lists: She did this and this and this...instead of she did this as she did this and then she did that.... I don't know if I am making sense.
Or this: "Liza sat up, rubbed her eyes, and got out of the carriage. I jumped out next and put my arm around my sister."
Instead of: "Liza sat up and rubbed her eyes and got out of the carriage. I jumped out and put my arm around my sister."
I tend to over use "as". There are several ways to connect thoughts. It's easy to get stuck in a "connection" rut and only use one way. I must say that even with my minor suggestions, I loved every word. You girls do a very good job keeping the characters faithful to Jane's original design. I feel that she would approve of your additions to her stories. If you keep all this writing up, I will have to go down to Wal-Mart to get your books instead of being able to read them on your blog!
Much love to you! Auntie D